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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Jun. 9 2010 at 2:58 pm
starlight26 GOLD, Miramar, Florida
11 articles 7 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
*life isnt about pretending to be something you&#039;re not. It about being who you are and finding someone <br /> who loves every bit of it.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Life&#039;s tradegy is that we get old too soon and wise too late&quot;

Thats great critical thinking...I agree.

on Jun. 9 2010 at 2:56 pm
starlight26 GOLD, Miramar, Florida
11 articles 7 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
*life isnt about pretending to be something you&#039;re not. It about being who you are and finding someone <br /> who loves every bit of it.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Life&#039;s tradegy is that we get old too soon and wise too late&quot;

......hehe

on Jun. 9 2010 at 2:55 pm
starlight26 GOLD, Miramar, Florida
11 articles 7 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
*life isnt about pretending to be something you&#039;re not. It about being who you are and finding someone <br /> who loves every bit of it.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Life&#039;s tradegy is that we get old too soon and wise too late&quot;

The poem was BEAUTIFUL!!! You have to admit.

on Jun. 9 2010 at 2:54 pm
starlight26 GOLD, Miramar, Florida
11 articles 7 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
*life isnt about pretending to be something you&#039;re not. It about being who you are and finding someone <br /> who loves every bit of it.&quot;<br /> <br /> &quot;Life&#039;s tradegy is that we get old too soon and wise too late&quot;

Wow, that could go on to a great debate..anyway, you both have good points. Personally, I liked the poem because I understood why the dad had the kid on a "chain". It was because he loved his son and wasn't ready to let him "fly" . Yet I sitll agree with what you said sarah.

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on Jun. 9 2010 at 1:18 pm
-Mz.S- SILVER, Quincy, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
two fingers up &amp; i&#039;m out! ;)

No, the poem is amazing.

I wonder why they stopped posting your comments.


-Mz.S- SILVER said...
on Jun. 9 2010 at 1:16 pm
-Mz.S- SILVER, Quincy, Illinois
9 articles 1 photo 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
two fingers up &amp; i&#039;m out! ;)

Yeah. Duh.

on Jun. 9 2010 at 10:30 am
fireeyedgirl SILVER, Dulles, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;I think that most of us, anyway, read these stories that we know are not &quot;true&quot; because we&#039;re hungry for another kind of truth: the mythic truth about human nature in general, the particular truth about those life-communities that define our own identity, and the most specific truth of all: our own self-story. Fiction, because it is not about someone who lived in the real world, always has the possibility of being about oneself. &quot;<br /> &mdash; Orson Scott Card

I think that would be a metaphorical chain to keep him from flying.

jjhaha!luvu said...
on Jun. 9 2010 at 10:27 am
Hummmm....... i did! idk whats up cuz i did post the link! lomg can we say gay?

Katie_me said...
on Jun. 9 2010 at 9:04 am
...Ok I don't get it, when you said your dad pulled on a chain and you were bound... does that mean your father had you on a chain??? If so that is so so wrong.

on Jun. 9 2010 at 8:36 am
seriously,  that last comment made no sense. you need to reread that statement and change a few things. thank you.

on Jun. 9 2010 at 8:33 am

Believe it or not, there is actually a few more lines in the poem. So...........................................................................................................................................................................................

if you get rid of that line, i don't think it will be the death of the poem.

 

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on Jun. 9 2010 at 8:28 am
aye yo grrrrrl. WADDUP.

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on Jun. 8 2010 at 7:39 pm
DaiJanai2013 BRONZE, San Bernardino, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;When you meet a new person the first thing they know about is your name &hellip;. and the first thing they&rsquo;ll remember about you is how you carried it&quot;- Dai janai Yarber

That wasss a greatt poem !!!!

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on Jun. 8 2010 at 5:12 pm
kms777 GOLD, Winn, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;learn from your mistakes but regret not a thing&quot;

yea i thout it was awesome. ur a really great poet. i gave you five stars. i hope youll rate some of mine too, so i can get better.

on Jun. 7 2010 at 11:24 pm
Bonianlethalxx2 SILVER, Concord, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Hard work defeats talent when talent fails to work hard&quot; Rene Maher (unknown original)

Really great poem, i liked that you used rhyme but not to to much. Great balance. All around really good job.

on Jun. 7 2010 at 5:37 pm
RobertoO PLATINUM, Barrington Hills, Illinois
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Reading this poem was enjoyable, it has made my late afternoon/early evening.

on Jun. 6 2010 at 5:55 pm
Karma_Chameleon SILVER, English, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
To be able to say &quot;I love you&quot; one must first be able to say &quot;I&quot; - Ayn Rand

Wow, good job providing constructive feedback. :-/

on Jun. 6 2010 at 5:49 pm
Brianagg SILVER, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;It is better to have loved and lost than to never have loved at all&quot;

this poem is amazing ! it has alot of emotion and passion embedded into the words.

on Jun. 6 2010 at 1:23 am
This poem is so touching. I really enjoyed this poem. It reminded me of how life can hold you down.